Reflections
Writing in Mrs.Turner's class has taken me for a ride. It has been an enjoyment, and I have even found myself sometimes enthused about writing. That must be a first. At times I am reluctant to start but once I am it is hard to stop. For the Crucible essay my goal for writing was to take a deeper look at a Abigail and compare her to an object in life. The main idea for my paper was to show how Miller used Abigail to illustrate how how lies destroyed a community, then I compared that to the element fire. While developing my paper I had to have the quietness of my room to brainstorm thoughts I wanted to include in it. Throughout the paper I tried to use examples to support my opinions from the play the Crucible. During the piece I implied the major points we discussed in class to develop the basis for my paper. From writing this paper I learned how to take a random object and compare it to the personality and characteristics of a character. The other paper which is on my blog is called Nature. The purpose was to relate Emerson and Thoreau view of transcendentalism to my experience of the nature walk. In this paper I used at least one quote from Emerson and one for Thoreau that I could compare my view about nature or another element of transcendentalism to his. I highlighted the reasons to why I basically disagreed with the concept of transcendentalism in today's time. There was time to think about what to write and time to actually write it well, many of times what I thought about and actually wrote were different. I may have really good thoughts, but can not figure out how to put them on paper. Sometimes it is the opposite I can not think of one word, but once I began writing thoughts just began to come and wow there is my rough draft. I may not have used everything I learned in every paper but I definitely learned how to somewhat develope a vivid descriptive paper and used brushstrokes, find specific examples from the text to support your opinions, and how to tie the main idea of the paper in to a developed thesis.
Truely I did not have a specific place outside of school where I revised my work. I basically did all of my writing in school. Most of the time right after I read Mrs. Turner's or another classmates comments I would then think of ways to change my mistakes and do so. A lot of my thoughts were as I was typing at the computer. Maybe next time I can actually go home and get in that quiet place and think of creative ways to improve my paper. Each of the three different kind of revisions (revise new ideas, revise using craft lessons, and revise to polish and clarify awkward sentence structures etc) were done at school. An example of my revision is when I added the quote from Abigail " Now look you. All of you. We danced. And Tituba conjured Ruth Putnam's dead sisters. And that is all. And mark this. Let either of you breathe a word, or the edge of a word, about the other things, and I will come to you in the black of some terrible night and I will bring a pointy reckoning that will shudder you. And you know I can do it;" Abigail is not afraid to take drastic measures to assure her innocence. so that I could have text from the book to support my opinion of Abigail. In the Nature essay I was encouraged to add imagry from my nature walk so I added, "the thick walls of trees outlining the tiny pathway gave you just enough space to walk, until you reached the inner parts of the wood. The tall trees blanketed the entire floor of the woods, only letting tiny amounts of sun pierce through the condensed trees." In the Nature essay I also change my wording with thanks to my editors that helped comment on my paper. One example is this being my old sentence-"The only experience I managed to meet <-- some different word here maybe? with was the laughter anand non-terminating voices of my teenage adolescent teenage and adolescent is a little redundant you maybe could use another adjective to describe the teenagers peers." to this being my new revised sentence "The only experience I managed to acquire was the laughter and non-terminating voices of my teenage peers."
After reading Rachel's memoir one thing that really stood out to me was how she did not use many being verbs. I really struggle with that so maybe next time I will always try to take that in to account. http://rachelwhitmire.blogspot.com/ Rachel made the subject actually be at the beginning of the sentence and is doing the action. Erika's writing show's me how to stay on topic and make every thing flow throughout the story. A link to her blog is: http://erikaverbeck.blogspot.com/. Last but not least from Erika Burton's Scarlett letter essay I really saw the use of quotes throughout the paper!http://erika-burton.blogspot.com/
Writing in Mrs.Turner's class has taken me for a ride. It has been an enjoyment, and I have even found myself sometimes enthused about writing. That must be a first. At times I am reluctant to start but once I am it is hard to stop. For the Crucible essay my goal for writing was to take a deeper look at a Abigail and compare her to an object in life. The main idea for my paper was to show how Miller used Abigail to illustrate how how lies destroyed a community, then I compared that to the element fire. While developing my paper I had to have the quietness of my room to brainstorm thoughts I wanted to include in it. Throughout the paper I tried to use examples to support my opinions from the play the Crucible. During the piece I implied the major points we discussed in class to develop the basis for my paper. From writing this paper I learned how to take a random object and compare it to the personality and characteristics of a character. The other paper which is on my blog is called Nature. The purpose was to relate Emerson and Thoreau view of transcendentalism to my experience of the nature walk. In this paper I used at least one quote from Emerson and one for Thoreau that I could compare my view about nature or another element of transcendentalism to his. I highlighted the reasons to why I basically disagreed with the concept of transcendentalism in today's time. There was time to think about what to write and time to actually write it well, many of times what I thought about and actually wrote were different. I may have really good thoughts, but can not figure out how to put them on paper. Sometimes it is the opposite I can not think of one word, but once I began writing thoughts just began to come and wow there is my rough draft. I may not have used everything I learned in every paper but I definitely learned how to somewhat develope a vivid descriptive paper and used brushstrokes, find specific examples from the text to support your opinions, and how to tie the main idea of the paper in to a developed thesis.
Truely I did not have a specific place outside of school where I revised my work. I basically did all of my writing in school. Most of the time right after I read Mrs. Turner's or another classmates comments I would then think of ways to change my mistakes and do so. A lot of my thoughts were as I was typing at the computer. Maybe next time I can actually go home and get in that quiet place and think of creative ways to improve my paper. Each of the three different kind of revisions (revise new ideas, revise using craft lessons, and revise to polish and clarify awkward sentence structures etc) were done at school. An example of my revision is when I added the quote from Abigail " Now look you. All of you. We danced. And Tituba conjured Ruth Putnam's dead sisters. And that is all. And mark this. Let either of you breathe a word, or the edge of a word, about the other things, and I will come to you in the black of some terrible night and I will bring a pointy reckoning that will shudder you. And you know I can do it;" Abigail is not afraid to take drastic measures to assure her innocence. so that I could have text from the book to support my opinion of Abigail. In the Nature essay I was encouraged to add imagry from my nature walk so I added, "the thick walls of trees outlining the tiny pathway gave you just enough space to walk, until you reached the inner parts of the wood. The tall trees blanketed the entire floor of the woods, only letting tiny amounts of sun pierce through the condensed trees." In the Nature essay I also change my wording with thanks to my editors that helped comment on my paper. One example is this being my old sentence-"The only experience I managed to meet <-- some different word here maybe? with was the laughter anand non-terminating voices of my teenage adolescent teenage and adolescent is a little redundant you maybe could use another adjective to describe the teenagers peers." to this being my new revised sentence "The only experience I managed to acquire was the laughter and non-terminating voices of my teenage peers."
After reading Rachel's memoir one thing that really stood out to me was how she did not use many being verbs. I really struggle with that so maybe next time I will always try to take that in to account. http://rachelwhitmire.blogspot.com/ Rachel made the subject actually be at the beginning of the sentence and is doing the action. Erika's writing show's me how to stay on topic and make every thing flow throughout the story. A link to her blog is: http://erikaverbeck.blogspot.com/. Last but not least from Erika Burton's Scarlett letter essay I really saw the use of quotes throughout the paper!http://erika-burton.blogspot.com/
1 comment:
Markeshia, I'm glad that you have enjoyed writing this semester. You did a great job detailing your process and explaining your revisions. I'm glad that you are open to what your classmates say.
Excellent job!
Mrs. T.
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